My story idea

I almost forgot to talk about the story idea that kept me up from 1 to 3 am (I fell asleep around 11, then woke up again around 12:30/1).

Its mostly affected by the fact that I watched The Mask of Zorro yesterday. Anyway, its the story of this woman, and the man she loves, but doesn't know she loves right away. She runs into him at a dance or something, and he grabs her out of the crowd and kisses her, then tells her that the next time he kisses her, they will be married (more eloquently said). She dismisses him as drunk, or delusional, or cocky, or all of the above. then, weeks later, her father calls her into the parlor, and she finds the same man sitting there as suitor. they clash right away, and argue and glare at each other all the time, but its contrasted by his passion and love for her.
She walks him to his room that night, and they exchange the formalities of goodnight. she curtises all formal and meek, and starts to walk away when he grabs her, takes her into his room, and pushes her against the wall. He gets real close, only milimeters away from her face, but doesn't kiss her. the passion is eminating from his eyes, and she can feel it, and her breath comes heavy and suddenly all she wants to do is kiss him, but he whispers to her "I'm going to keep my promise," and then lets her go, pushing her out the door. The door accidently shuts on her skirt, and she pulls at it a moment,then stands there awkwardly. he opens the door slightly and lets her skirt go, and she goes to bed.
they do this routine for some weeks, and they fall in love with each other, with their passion, their fire, they fall in love with the other's love. They get engaged, but then he tells her that he has to go, and he doesn't know when he will be back, but he will be back, and that she has to wait for him. "I promise i'll come back" he tells her,and she believes him, because he's always kept his promises.
three years pass without sight/sound of him, and one night, a strange man comes into her room with a rag drenched in chloroform and kidnaps her (she's the daughter of a rich nobleman). scared out of her mind, she wakes up in a strange bed and she's crying--bawling. I don't know how much time passes, but she spends it in the bed, crying. there is a tustle outside the door, she can hear it, and a man comes through the door, (an evil one) and tries to grab her, to hurt her. she kicks and screams, and he gets tired of her fighting, and cunks her on the top of the head, knocking her out. so she doesn't see her man come in right behind the evil guy, fight him and win, and carry her out safely.
she wakes up in his arms and she immediately knows who it is. she smiles.
"you came back," she says. he says that he can't stay, that he will be back some day, but not today. she is sad, and disappointed, but they ride together, in each other's arms, and they are happy. he drops her off at her house, and tells her to tell them she escaped, not to mention a word of him, and then gallops off. mysterious, but she does what he says because she trusts him, and loves him. two years pass and the day comes when he does return, but her father isn't happy with him. he says he doesn't deserve her anymore, he left without a word, and he doesn't deserve her. He tells her father that he loves her, but her father says he left, and isn't worthy anymore. she overhears the conversation, and comes down (in her night gown, its was early morning) and says that he told her he was leaving. That she knew, and she had waited. her father thinks about it, and says he will be given a chance, but he has to compete against the other suitors. she asks what other suitors, she hasn't seen any. he says they've been there, but he's kept them under raps. she looks hurt, but will take what she can get.
"Okay," her man says, obviously not worried about having to compete with others. he knows he has her heart forever. She walks him to his room (his room is moved to the servants quarters, which was another big tizzy). but he says goodnight and closes the door--the fire gone, the passion is missing. feeling rejected, she sulks back to her room, and cries.
the other suitor guy comes, and there's a whole scene where he is making her laugh,and the other man, the one who came back, is sitting there unemotional while the other guy is making her laugh. she keeps looking over at him, like, TRY! but he doesn't. she begins to doubt what they had.
she walks him to his room and confronts him about how he's lost his fire, lost his passion, and she doesn't know what to think anymore. she goes back to her room and cries herself to sleep.
the next day something snaps and the guy brings his game back, and she is happy, and falls for him all over again. the choice is obvious, even to her father, knowing that to deny her the man she loves would be a colossal mistake. so they get married. for sure this time, he doens't run off, and she is happy. he kisses her again, as man and wife, and he keeps kissing her. finally they walk back down the isle, and when they get to the steps, before everyone has joined them, he tells her he is sorry,but he has to leave."i' will come back, i promise," he tells her. "but i have to go," she is confused, but nods, and he is off.
a year later, she is still alone, a married woman with no husband. a man appears in her room, and he attacks her. she kicks and scratches, and he gets off.
"You would be wise to do as i say,"he says, and then two men bring in her husband, tied up. surprised, she looks at the man (the suitor guy from before)
"Let him go," she tells him.
"I'll make you a deal," the man says. "You must reveal everything, the truth about what happened," he says.
"No..."
"tell him the truth, and i will let him go.... and you must kiss me." she starts to cry, and looks at her husband in the eyes.
"I'm so sorry," she cries.
"Tell him!"
she reveals that he was the man who kidnapped her, but that wasn't all. he had raped her, taken her, and that he had left her with child. she can see the pain on his face at the news. she continues, crying herself, that she had carried the child three months when she lost the child. she says thats why he wanted to marry her, to make up for the 'black mark' on his record. he wanted to marry her, to fill her with his children, to erase the black mark of losing the child. her husband's face contorts into disgust.
the suitor guy waits for her to finish her part of the deal. she goes to him, and leans toward him, hoviering milimeters from his face, not kissing him, but giving the idea that she would, the anticipation killing him. at that moment, her husband broke the bonds that tied him, and he attacks the suitor guy, scuffling for a bit before the guy is knocked unconscious. her husband looks at her for a moment, then drags the man out of the room. he comes back some minutes later, and looks at her wearily.
"I'm so sorry!" she told him.
"you knew it was him," he said. she nodded. "I knew about the baby," he told her. the surprise showed on her face. "people talk, you hear things, especially when its about the woman you love."
she gave him a look of shock, then smiles. "You must be tired," she said. "come to bed."
he smiles, and nods, joining her. she curls up next to him, kisses his chest once, and tells him good night. he says good night, too, his arms wrapped around her. "I love you," he says.
"I love you," she says back, and they fall alseep.


and then I fell asleep, and the story was ended. thats the story that kept me up for two hours. what do you think? is it any good? I like it a lot. romance, adventure, mystery. i need to figure out where he goes for years, and why he had lost his passion when he came back the first time. but, those are holes that can be easily filled.

Shae